Oct 26, 2007

Second Essay Outline

Introduction
I like the place that I can relax. My house is the best house for me.
All my favorite places make me refresh.


My room
I like my room. I arranged my room that I like. My room is very simple design. The light is very cute. I choose the one from 30 kind of lights.

Sofa at living
There is a new sofa in living room. My house has just built since last year. My mother decided to situate a nice sofa. When I got home, I sit down on the sofa and watch the TV. After I have eaten the dinner, I sit down the sofa with my dog.

In front of a computer
I’m keen on using my computer now. When I use Internet, I often listen to the music by sonic player of the computer. I like to see and write a blog. Or I can know any information by using a computer.


Conclusion
I like those places. I like my house is the best.

(170 words)

1 comment:

Paul Beaufait said...

Hello again, Makko!

This essay deserves the label "essays", not "quickposts", and an accurate and descriptive title. This post looks like more of an essay than an outline, and "second" doesn't give visitors any idea what your essay is about.

Please revise the title, and extend each paragraph to at least three sentences in length (five sentences per paragraph would be even better). Then include a word count that you can include in your writing portfolio.

Cheers.